This shows real promise. There are a couple of elements of feedback I’d like to give that might be better done verbally, so if you don’t mind a phone call or dropping down to school – that would be great.
In the main:
1) Address the ‘argument’ of the statement more thoroughly. As opposed to simply finding a statement that matches the novel and then answering as if the statement is a question about the novel, the idea for a stronger response is that you argue the extent to which you agree with the statement. This means starting with a response to the statement as it replies to ALL literature, and then locating your answer in the dystopian genre (which is very helpful, because its purpose is very clearly defined) and then using your novel as the evidence to support this. The hard work here is done in the introduction – but should then thread through the essay, particularly in your paragraph topic sentences.
2) Avoid too much plot re-telling. You’re better to talk about language, specific events, setting and other authorial effects, or your essay will start to read like an annotated summary – which is not what you’re looking for.
As I said, I’m happy to talk this through with you if you wish.
Your ideas and references to the text (quotations) are coming along nicely – I’d say the more quality quotes the better. 2-3 per paragraph, ideally.
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This shows real promise. There are a couple of elements of feedback I’d like to give that might be better done verbally, so if you don’t mind a phone call or dropping down to school – that would be great.
In the main:
1) Address the ‘argument’ of the statement more thoroughly. As opposed to simply finding a statement that matches the novel and then answering as if the statement is a question about the novel, the idea for a stronger response is that you argue the extent to which you agree with the statement. This means starting with a response to the statement as it replies to ALL literature, and then locating your answer in the dystopian genre (which is very helpful, because its purpose is very clearly defined) and then using your novel as the evidence to support this. The hard work here is done in the introduction – but should then thread through the essay, particularly in your paragraph topic sentences.
2) Avoid too much plot re-telling. You’re better to talk about language, specific events, setting and other authorial effects, or your essay will start to read like an annotated summary – which is not what you’re looking for.
As I said, I’m happy to talk this through with you if you wish.
Your ideas and references to the text (quotations) are coming along nicely – I’d say the more quality quotes the better. 2-3 per paragraph, ideally.
Righto!
CW